Theory

It was good that you mentioned relevant social psychology concepts and terms; you actually needed to refer to and apply relevant psychological theory to your discussion. You also needed to spend more time outlining personally-relevant social factors and how these social factors have interacted to contribute to your current social identity, rather than discussing how social identity develops or factors that contribute to one’s social identity development in a generic sense. Your concept map could have been simplified, as you seem to have tried to incorporate too much information in it.

Research

You needed to refer to and outline more research studies to support and illustrate the ideas and concepts discussed in your blog.

Written Communication

Written expression was generally clear and easy to follow. Some minor errors with the presentation of in-text references were present. Many of the ideas and concepts could have been structured better. Avoid using short paragraphs in your Psychology written assignments.

On-line Engagement

Your previous blog posting was interesting – I must confess that it brought some levity to an otherwise stressful situation of having to mark the blog discussions! More on-line engagement is required. One thing you could do to increase your on-line engagement is to post messages on your blog site that involve situations from your own daily life or other peoples’ daily lives (e.g., friends and acquaintances) that reflect examples of the key concepts and psychological theories covered in the unit syllabus. You also needed to include your self-evaluation against the marking criteria.